I think it'll work well as an opening for the book, leading people to read more stories in the hope of getting answers to those questions (some will be answered, some won't). But I'm not sure that the story really does stand alone. If it doesn't, it'll be the only one in the collection that I think I'm willing to have that happen with...but I'd still rather that I could make it stand alone while still fulfilling its function in the book. Just don't know if I can do it. This novel-in-stories idea is not nearly as easy as I thought it would be!
I took some time this morning to convert my genealogy charts to Word documents so that I could insert them into the book; they do give things away, so I don't really advise consulting them, but if you find yourself utterly confused, you could sort of glance at them and try not to read more than the bit you need help with. :-) They're awfully cramped, since they're on a portrait-format page, but I think they're readable. If I actually manage to sell this book, I'm sure the publisher can do them up all pretty then.
One more story left to revise, one to write. Coming up on the home stretch...
Of course, there will be masses of revising yet to come, I'm sure, once I finish this first full draft and send it out to all and sundry for comments. But I'll worry about that later.
I don’t know if this is supposed to be one of the secrets…so if it is don’t explain…but how do these two 18 year olds afford a place to live? Savitha doesn’t work and Sanjeev seems to be just whittling all day. I’m sorry if I missed something. Anyways I love the story and I think it can stand on it’s own. Hope you are having a great day!
Oh, they do both work — they’re both programmers, and actually work pretty long hours. I guess I need to make that clearer?
oooh hence the long hours in front of the computer. I guess I got confused cause the indirect mention of the Sim’s game she plays for hours. That rings true though since I know many programmer’s who spend just as much time playing games as working, though usually not as young. Thanks for the explanation!
No, thank *you* for pointing it out. I think the last draft had some mention of their being programmers, but it was in the midst of a longer boring paragraph which I cut.