Ideally, what I'd like to do at this point is read the whole thing out loud. I feel silly, reading to myself, but I've done it before and I can do it again. It's invaluable for smoothing out the language, catching the bits that are over the top, repetitive, or just plain bad. It's also super time-consuming, so we'll see how it goes.
Once I give it to Marjorie, she'll read it and give it back with comments. I may wait for the out-loud bit until then, because I'll need to implement her changes, and will then have a little time to fine-tune language. (Not sure how much time. A few days? A week?) It'll be post-Kriti, so I should be much more relaxed.
I can't believe it's done.